Rogues Revenge Ch 22 completed 18th Nov

[SteveMill]

The third part of the Rogue Trilogy, the first part to be published in January (see here for more details - http://www.spaceritual.com/1977/11201.html), gallops towards resolution.

Chapter 22: The Beating of the Drums

“Thanks for coming Jack.” His voice sounded hollow and somehow distant against the background murmur of the party as it strained to take the sort of wing Corrin would have liked.

Max took the proffered whisky and killed it with a single swallow. It burned down his throat and sat in the pit of his empty stomach, a warmth that touched nothing because there was nothing to touch. He almost envied Kaitrin her grief; at least she was feeling something, this was just like stepping back into a dark tunnel. Just the faint echoes of what he’d felt before, when he thought he’d killed Paskaal, when he did kill Challenger and his crew.


Continued on the Space Ritual site - follow the sig.

[KiwiNZ]

Excellent read! Looks like there is a lot of tension building up. That Split invasion really does look weird, or should it be people who are coming to take side with Max? That'd be handy

Lookiong forward to the next part of the chapter.

[Faze]

Yet another good read Steve.

Congrats on the Book.

[Al]

Well needed bump.

Great stuff and certainly leaves a cliffhanger. Cant wait for the next section.

Al

[Mercenary]

Good read,

A little bit of a strange twist in the last bit.

[Moss]

Cool read again Steve, nicely captured emotions at the begining, looks like another fight brewing by the end of this section too. Looking forward to the next bit, I know your busy but I hope it won't be too long.

Cheers.

[SteveMill]

Cool read again Steve, nicely captured emotions at the begining, looks like another fight brewing by the end of this section too. Looking forward to the next bit, I know your busy but I hope it won't be too long.

Cheers.

Hoping to get this chapter finished Wednesday.

[SteveMill]

Chapter completed 18/11

[Faze]

Nice one Steve.

Any chance of a Chaper that has NOT got a cliffhanger ending?

[Al]

Haven't read through yet but could you add a seperating line of something between parts 1 and 2.

Al

[SteveMill]

Nice one Steve.

Any chance of a Chaper that has NOT got a cliffhanger ending?

The very last chapter - possibly.

[SteveMill]

Haven't read through yet but could you add a seperating line of something between parts 1 and 2.

Al

Wish..comand.. done

[Mercenary]

Excellent again, it looks like Max is also being ultra cautious with Jackson too.

And do I sense a subtle change in the writing style, a few more historical combat references, scimitars etc, or is it just me.

Tried posting a reply on your site but it's not accepting anything. Not certain is anyone else is having the same problem.

[Al]

site seems fine and a damn good read.

Al

[SteveMill]

Excellent again, it looks like Max is also being ultra cautious with Jackson too.

And do I sense a subtle change in the writing style, a few more historical combat references, scimitars etc, or is it just me.

Tried posting a reply on your site but it's not accepting anything. Not certain is anyone else is having the same problem.

I'm assuming that as Argon civilisation evolved back up the tech tree they would develop similar weapons with similar names - like they named animals after Earth ones (only explanation I can come up with for the Earth names of ships).

I'm looking forward to writing fantasy fiction rather than SF so I can begin using recognisable imagery.

Not sure what the site problems are, Al has posted there.

Al - thanks for the correction - changes made.

[Mercenary]

I'm assuming that as Argon civilisation evolved back up the tech tree they would develop similar weapons with similar names - like they named animals after Earth ones (only explanation I can come up with for the Earth names of ships).

I'm looking forward to writing fantasy fiction rather than SF so I can begin using recognisable imagery.

The use of the terms works really well

But I do like to think the Argon would have had a bit of a head start in terms of technology, it was spacecraft that dumped them on the planet. Easier to believe that as they came to recognise their true heritage, through the Goner. That the old archieves which contained the Star Wars films you referenced in previous chapters, also had a great deal of information about Earth history.

Think the trouble with the site maybe at this end. Tried a reboot and still didn't work but that's not to say something maybe affecting the network.

Should get my copy of NewNovelist tomorrow..

[SteveMill]

I'm assuming that as Argon civilisation evolved back up the tech tree they would develop similar weapons with similar names - like they named animals after Earth ones (only explanation I can come up with for the Earth names of ships).

I'm looking forward to writing fantasy fiction rather than SF so I can begin using recognisable imagery.

The use of the terms works really well

But I do like to think the Argon would have had a bit of a head start in terms of technology, it was spacecraft that dumped them on the planet. Easier to believe that as they came to recognise their true heritage, through the Goner. That the old archieves which contained the Star Wars films you referenced in previous chapters, also had a great deal of information about Earth history.

Think the trouble with the site maybe at this end. Tried a reboot and still didn't work but that's not to say something maybe affecting the network.

Should get my copy of NewNovelist tomorrow..

As far as i remember the Argon civilisation regressed. They worked their way up from a crashed spaceship and so would have to reinvent technologies and rediscover ancient techniques.

Well at least in my X-Universe as I didn't have much knowledge of the back story and what their is says Argon moved from the dark ages to spceflight in 400 years, possibly thanks to gods from space. This suggests that Argon may be a human, native humanoid hybrid.

There are also considerable differences between the old background docs from XBTF and the later timelines. I worked from the former, which is why my Boron are amphibious, not aquatic.

The Goner rescued knowledge in written form - and the myths I refer to would have been ancient tales by the time of the crash, like arthurian legends, not the actual films - archetypal figures from a time 'seen through a mirror darkly' so that their origins and nature were lost enough for them to be treated like Arthur is. History or legend? A mix of both etc.

Looking forward to seeing what influence using NN will have on the style and structure of your story.

[Mercenary]

As far as i remember the Argon civilisation regressed. They worked their way up from a crashed spaceship and so would have to reinvent technologies and rediscover ancient techniques.

Well at least in my X-Universe as I didn't have much knowledge of the back story and what their is says Argon moved from the dark ages to spceflight in 400 years, possibly thanks to gods from space. This suggests that Argon may be a human, native humanoid hybrid.

There are also considerable differences between the old background docs from XBTF and the later timelines. I worked from the former, which is why my Boron are amphibious, not aquatic.

The Goner rescued knowledge in written form - and the myths I refer to would have been ancient tales by the time of the crash, like arthurian legends, not the actual films - archetypal figures from a time 'seen through a mirror darkly' so that their origins and nature were lost enough for them to be treated like Arthur is. History or legend? A mix of both etc.

Looking forward to seeing what influence using NN will have on the style and structure of your story.

Ahh, such is the power of the novelist....

I guess I would need to read the original to understand all the circumstances. Needless to say it sounds like no engineers survived the crash.

Just a few people with a little bit of know how can move a whole civilisation forward in a remarkably short space of time.

Legends and myths as spoken and retold from father to son, until written down and forgotten...

I've already written a few hundred words for the missing year so it'll be interesting to see what happens when I retype it.

[SteveMill]

I've already written a few hundred words for the missing year so it'll be interesting to see what happens when I retype it.

No! You need to work from scratch with NN - take on board what the tutorials say and then write. I guarantee it'll be a lot better opening.

[KiwiNZ]

Excellent finish!!! Very exciting battle. and yes, I agree with what Moss posted. Good to see over-confidence wearing out in such a nice fashion
Looks like Max had to show his talent again after quite some time.

Well, Jackson is caught off guard. So if he intends to take out Max he will have to do it without preparation, same accounts for Hagman.

Can't wait to see how that develops. I appears as though we are heading for the big finale.