Anyway as the new cunning plan is to only post alterations when I have something I am - really - happy with (well reasonably happy with) this one may take a while!
Revised Chapter 0 posted 25 Jun 08
Revised Chapter 1 posted 25 Jun 08
Revised Chapter 2 posted 25 Jun 08
Revised Chapter 3 posted 05 Jul 08
Damn more typos, and errors to fix sigh!
Would be grateful for any comments on any of the Revised Chapters: better, worse, diabolical, not enough action, too much dialogue, too much background??
I did put in a few new ideas, and changed things around a bit last time I posted. I know they still have some typos, and errors fix one some how another slips in. Of course I appreciate rereading stuff is a bit boring even with added bits so no pressure, but some feedback would help at this point!
Entirely New Chapter Four posted - mon 14th July 08
More err Pirate frolics in Elena's Fortune. Old Chapter 4 is now Chapter 5 Chapter 5 being added to 6.
P66.
****A little bad news -
The computer I have been using has died a death (my own attempts at resurrection have so far failed). My immediate ability to easily work on corrections, and updates to 'Reapers Passage' has gone AWOL.
Guess I'll take this as an opportunity to get my head together, and get a proper bit of distance from the story. Not really happy with the: add, change, post a bit at a time process. It wasn't working for me. In essence this approach was a bad habit developed from the initial process of posting serial story updates. It was a mistake to carry this into the revision, correction, and edit stage.
As mentioned I was hoping for more comments, thoughts, and feedback but as this remains elusive I will struggle along off line with the whole thing when I have the time. Besides it really needs printed out by me, and looked at much more as a whole - something I had originally intended. Impatience got the better of me.
As it stands I hope any new readers will forgive the 'Reapers Passage' current state of rather mixed content. Please appreciate the story is (a first attempt), and a WIP thanks.
Paranoid66 Tue 5th August 2008.
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Paranoid66, I've created a word document out of the story (For my own sake of being able to read it a 2nd time offline). I can mail it to you if you want?
A few notes on the file:
1020 pages & 3.38mb in size.
Might to some further comment on the story as I read them, probably have to break up the reading/comments to about 1/3 each cause of the story size (trying to remember stuff about page 20 when I'm at 834 might be a bit hard
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Don't give up on the re-write
A few notes on the file:
1020 pages & 3.38mb in size.
Might to some further comment on the story as I read them, probably have to break up the reading/comments to about 1/3 each cause of the story size (trying to remember stuff about page 20 when I'm at 834 might be a bit hard
)Don't give up on the re-write
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1020 pages: interesting Snowship is that at A4 and using what font size / line spacing?
I don't currently have access to word (currently using works on a laptop). My copy of word is installed on another PC that I owned now in England while I am back in NI and also only at the moment have internet via visits to the Library. I have been thinking about buying a new cheap printer to do much the same thing - as in print out and read the cursed thing on hard copy - someday soon perhaps.
I had done a lot of work on it off line, but wasn't too happy with the result - I felt I needed a bit of space from it. I found myself doing rewrite upon rewrite of some of the same old chapters - it was deadly.
I also find it hard to remember what I have previously written (my memory is rubbish) another reason why I tend to repeat things too much and why I have to read it, and read it again and... you get the drift.
Otherwise all outside comments are much appreciated as I am just far too close to it right now.
I don't currently have access to word (currently using works on a laptop). My copy of word is installed on another PC that I owned now in England while I am back in NI and also only at the moment have internet via visits to the Library. I have been thinking about buying a new cheap printer to do much the same thing - as in print out and read the cursed thing on hard copy - someday soon perhaps.
I had done a lot of work on it off line, but wasn't too happy with the result - I felt I needed a bit of space from it. I found myself doing rewrite upon rewrite of some of the same old chapters - it was deadly.
I also find it hard to remember what I have previously written (my memory is rubbish) another reason why I tend to repeat things too much and why I have to read it, and read it again and... you get the drift.
Otherwise all outside comments are much appreciated as I am just far too close to it right now.
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font is Times New Roman 12, Postbody style (aka straight from the forum pages), even has the chapters headers in tiny [7.5 TNR] and Large [13.5, 18 etc TNR].
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Ok, I've now finished re-reading the latest incarnation... in one go (more or less ) 
(all read offline in my Word version...)
Things I found with the re-read;
1. It "read" better as a whole book than as posts in the forum. Flowed together better.
2. Maybe because of point 1, I found it seemed less "Jorac/Tur Ryn" orientated and more as having Anna Dei as the protagonist. (maybe I didn't get it right 1st time though)
3. Keep going with the markups when you get the change Paranoid66, I found a few were/we're and hell/he'll mistakes and places where there should be commas(,). But for spelling it was great and only one their/there problem. So you proof read very well before the posting
4. With a continous re-read some of the smaller characters didn't get lost. Which was good. And not really what I was expecting. (poor Jess & Ruth)
General comments;
I didn't think the additional prequel part (Febr in the Asylum) added anything to the storyline. (From his perspective or the Corealien part) It could have just been left as the comment-in-passing that was included in the story originally.
I liked some of the bulking of the plot in Freedom Station although it felt more character expansion for minor characters that any of the protagonists.
Again i felt Tur Ryns "Switch going off in his head" and his capturing of the other Corealien AI chips a bit of a cheat... I felt the story could still have evolved into the way you wanted it without him being given all the cards. (But maybe that's just me. Have a look when you get the time and discuss if you want).
I felt in some parts later in the story there was some "over description". Maybe when/if you do a whole re-read you might come to the same conclusion? (Again just my opinion).
My appreciation of the well-developed characters still stands and my enjoyment of the read is more from doing it continuously rather than in fits & starts.
Again good work there Paranoid66.
And maybe when you finish your Emissary Sphere story and feel like getting back in with your X-universe plotlines, a short story about Febr and discovering the Queen/corealien artifact would be great (much more story relevant IMO then the small forward chapter... but that's up to you).
FYI with my re-read, repaging from "sheet" to A4 and having page break for every chapter the book now comes to 1032 pages
Again thanks for the story Paranoid and again if you'd like my original copy or even the updated one just PM me.
Regards
Snowship
(all read offline in my Word version...)
Things I found with the re-read;
1. It "read" better as a whole book than as posts in the forum. Flowed together better.
2. Maybe because of point 1, I found it seemed less "Jorac/Tur Ryn" orientated and more as having Anna Dei as the protagonist. (maybe I didn't get it right 1st time though)
3. Keep going with the markups when you get the change Paranoid66, I found a few were/we're and hell/he'll mistakes and places where there should be commas(,). But for spelling it was great and only one their/there problem. So you proof read very well before the posting
4. With a continous re-read some of the smaller characters didn't get lost. Which was good. And not really what I was expecting. (poor Jess & Ruth)
General comments;
I didn't think the additional prequel part (Febr in the Asylum) added anything to the storyline. (From his perspective or the Corealien part) It could have just been left as the comment-in-passing that was included in the story originally.
I liked some of the bulking of the plot in Freedom Station although it felt more character expansion for minor characters that any of the protagonists.
Again i felt Tur Ryns "Switch going off in his head" and his capturing of the other Corealien AI chips a bit of a cheat... I felt the story could still have evolved into the way you wanted it without him being given all the cards. (But maybe that's just me. Have a look when you get the time and discuss if you want).
I felt in some parts later in the story there was some "over description". Maybe when/if you do a whole re-read you might come to the same conclusion? (Again just my opinion).
My appreciation of the well-developed characters still stands and my enjoyment of the read is more from doing it continuously rather than in fits & starts.
Again good work there Paranoid66.
And maybe when you finish your Emissary Sphere story and feel like getting back in with your X-universe plotlines, a short story about Febr and discovering the Queen/corealien artifact would be great (much more story relevant IMO then the small forward chapter... but that's up to you).
FYI with my re-read, repaging from "sheet" to A4 and having page break for every chapter the book now comes to 1032 pages
Again thanks for the story Paranoid and again if you'd like my original copy or even the updated one just PM me.
Regards
Snowship
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After reading randomly a little on the first page, I'm tempted to read the whole thing. But having to be online constantly and reading white letters on black background is not the best thing. You should consider uploading a PDF-version, Paranoid66. 
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Any chance you could send me that word document?
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Any chance you could send me that word document?
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@ enenra
I only made the copy for my personal use, the intellectual property is Paranoid's so it'd be best to ask him if he'd allow an uncontrolled copy to be sent
I only made the copy for my personal use, the intellectual property is Paranoid's so it'd be best to ask him if he'd allow an uncontrolled copy to be sent
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Paranoid66:
I've made a PDF of it, but was wondering if you wanted to add a spiel to it? (ie: this is a rework in progress... no unsanctioned distribution without author's permission... etc etc)
I could then either add it to the document and re-PDF or just add it as a Readme to a Zip file?
... Oh and the PDF is 5.7mb.
If not i'll just PM a copy to you and enenra.
I've made a PDF of it, but was wondering if you wanted to add a spiel to it? (ie: this is a rework in progress... no unsanctioned distribution without author's permission... etc etc)
I could then either add it to the document and re-PDF or just add it as a Readme to a Zip file?
... Oh and the PDF is 5.7mb.
If not i'll just PM a copy to you and enenra.
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Would you mind just adding these few lines on my behalf?
Advisory by the author [Victor Philpott] aka Paranoid66.
This PDF kindly created by Snowship is a snapshot of my X3 Fan Fiction story the 'Reapers Passage' (as it is currently posted on the Creative Forum of the Egosoft website).
However, the story itself remains a work in progress (though it has a beginning middle and end). It was originally posted serially one chapter at a time. I apologise for any rough edges and discrepancies brought in by a partial overall proof and the addition of some incomplete new material and changes. It remains my intent to revise the entire story as a whole at some future date.
In the meantime I am happy to share my efforts and imperfections with anyone.
Feel free to share it further (in a non profit manner) if you think it worthy of interest. All that I ask is that my authorship is acknowledged. As all stories it was made to be read and I hope enjoyed. I confess I was inspired by many sources not just the wondrous X games by Egosoft (all rights reserved). More sources than I can possibly list many inadvertent others in homage they too deserve credit. Nothing is made out of nothing!
Paranoid66
Advisory by the author [Victor Philpott] aka Paranoid66.
This PDF kindly created by Snowship is a snapshot of my X3 Fan Fiction story the 'Reapers Passage' (as it is currently posted on the Creative Forum of the Egosoft website).
However, the story itself remains a work in progress (though it has a beginning middle and end). It was originally posted serially one chapter at a time. I apologise for any rough edges and discrepancies brought in by a partial overall proof and the addition of some incomplete new material and changes. It remains my intent to revise the entire story as a whole at some future date.
In the meantime I am happy to share my efforts and imperfections with anyone.
Feel free to share it further (in a non profit manner) if you think it worthy of interest. All that I ask is that my authorship is acknowledged. As all stories it was made to be read and I hope enjoyed. I confess I was inspired by many sources not just the wondrous X games by Egosoft (all rights reserved). More sources than I can possibly list many inadvertent others in homage they too deserve credit. Nothing is made out of nothing!
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Done Paranoid, will re-create the pdf at work tomorrow and PM it
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