Anyway, interesting take on the simulator.
Wonder what FAITH's got planned planned for poor Ploopy?
Keep em comming
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No Probs there Paranoid, maybe it'll get re-editted after some chapters progress afterwards and how this chapter effects the flow is known?
Anyway, interesting take on the simulator.
Wonder what FAITH's got planned planned for poor Ploopy?
Keep em comming
Anyway, interesting take on the simulator.
Wonder what FAITH's got planned planned for poor Ploopy?
Keep em comming
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Oddly Ch 113 is growing on me Snowship just to be typically self-contradictory! 
Everything will need edited when I finish - for a start the whole deal is being posted more and more (in my mind at least) like a series with each later chapter being a rather short episode - in fact despite my original intention I frequently find it difficult not to see it that way at the moment!
The bigger it gets the more I think it is going to need a really heavy edit to fully consolidate it together, of course much easier with the full glorious benefit of hindsight!
Getting a printed copy to browse over should help there, been putting that off - as it is going to be a lot of paper, and toner groan!
Also I am learning I am very bad at bringing things to a close maybe I'm not the only one and that is why many books end abruptly sigh!
Everything will need edited when I finish - for a start the whole deal is being posted more and more (in my mind at least) like a series with each later chapter being a rather short episode - in fact despite my original intention I frequently find it difficult not to see it that way at the moment!
The bigger it gets the more I think it is going to need a really heavy edit to fully consolidate it together, of course much easier with the full glorious benefit of hindsight!
Getting a printed copy to browse over should help there, been putting that off - as it is going to be a lot of paper, and toner groan!
Also I am learning I am very bad at bringing things to a close maybe I'm not the only one and that is why many books end abruptly sigh!
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as for printing it...
Not that I condone the following...
...and it's not something you should do if you don't have permission
But have you considered printing it out at work
did I say that
Not that I condone the following...
...and it's not something you should do if you don't have permission
But have you considered printing it out at work
did I say that
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Like it alot, this chapter really moved the pace along.
Good to see Ravn back and a Fey/FAITH confrontation on the way 
and WOW you killed off Jess <-and after letting us know about the pregnancy.. you heartless man you 
is the sh#t going to hit the fan soon....
...Arkes not as smart as he might think, when they find out that someone thought dead is back at the fortress, then I think questions will get asked. He'll probably get strung out to dry. (though he'd deserve it).
Can't wait to see where developments lead
Snowship
Good to see Ravn back and a Fey/FAITH confrontation on the way
and WOW you killed off Jess
<-and after letting us know about the pregnancy.. you heartless man you is the sh#t going to hit the fan soon....
...Arkes not as smart as he might think, when they find out that someone thought dead is back at the fortress, then I think questions will get asked. He'll probably get strung out to dry. (though he'd deserve it).
Can't wait to see where developments lead
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Glad you enjoyed it Snowship bad stuff happens.
Reapers Passage Chapter 115 posted
Saturday 29th March 08
Starts to bring the bulk of the various players together the fan is spinning up, and the brown stuff is about to be onloaded! I'm amused by the level of distrust. Somehow missed out - G - well their is the next chapter!
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Reapers Passage Chapter 115 posted
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Starts to bring the bulk of the various players together the fan is spinning up, and the brown stuff is about to be onloaded! I'm amused by the level of distrust. Somehow missed out - G - well their is the next chapter!
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Yeah, Sly & BANE got a real wake-up. Must be harder for the old devil though rudely finding out he's just too small of a fish for notice.
Speaking of which, whens Wasted Intelligence going to make his appearance?
I'm assuming just before the fan gets hit
Nice ramping up of the tension in that chapter P66, can't wait for the next one.
Speaking of which, whens Wasted Intelligence going to make his appearance?
I'm assuming just before the fan gets hit
Nice ramping up of the tension in that chapter P66, can't wait for the next one.
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Posted after 12:00hrs so not an April fools joke I believe that is the traditional deadline but I could be wrong!
Reapers Passage Chapter 116 posted
Tuesday April 1st 08
BST already here in the not so sunny UK. the Reapers Passage has been a long journey - longer for some shorter for others - I can't help but think it is coming to its final destination!
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Reapers Passage Chapter 116 posted
Tuesday April 1st 08
BST already here in the not so sunny UK. the Reapers Passage has been a long journey - longer for some shorter for others - I can't help but think it is coming to its final destination!
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oow, so is FAITH dead-dead or soap opera dead?
was a bit disconcerting how suddenly Tur's hacked into BANES computer and then taken over...
maybe a little lead-up will be required on a later review... or did I miss something?
You can certainly feel end game rushing towards you.
Interesting to see how things progress now
Snowship
was a bit disconcerting how suddenly Tur's hacked into BANES computer and then taken over...
maybe a little lead-up will be required on a later review... or did I miss something?
You can certainly feel end game rushing towards you.
Interesting to see how things progress now
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It was a sudden unexpected development for Tur as well, but it makes sense - all will be made clear - a lot of it in the next chapter, you have to appreciate that he could do what he did partially because - BANE - not Tur Ryn already had all the necessary connections even into Tur Ryns bunker that was what made BANE so nasty the AI uploads - vast network - one that had expanded over time growing as the City was rebuilt often from the ground up following the civil conflict.Snowship wrote:was a bit disconcerting how suddenly Tur's hacked into BANES computer and then taken over...
maybe a little lead-up will be required on a later review... or did I miss something?
I prefer to leave the ultimate fate of FAITH open to conjecture for the moment.
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well I'll eagerly await the enlightening of the presidents subsumation 
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Incoming Snowship
Reapers Passage Chapter 117 Posted
Thursday 3rd April 08
I'll let you all blame Snowship for convincing me to techno babble lol. Anyway hope this clears it up. I hope others enjoy the moments of humour never quite sure! Anyway I thought it was a good change of pace!
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Reapers Passage Chapter 117 Posted
Thursday 3rd April 08
I'll let you all blame Snowship for convincing me to techno babble lol. Anyway hope this clears it up. I hope others enjoy the moments of humour never quite sure! Anyway I thought it was a good change of pace!
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whaa.. me... (Hastely puts on flame-proof suit)
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Good to see a early entry.
Wonder what WI is going to think of the Devils newfound powers... not much I bet (please please don't have the devil more powerful than Wasted)
But I do think those new powers have just signed the Devils death warrant.
Infact I think I can see how it's all going to end
next chapter remember to update the topics title
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Good to see a early entry.
Wonder what WI is going to think of the Devils newfound powers... not much I bet (please please don't have the devil more powerful than Wasted)
But I do think those new powers have just signed the Devils death warrant.
Infact I think I can see how it's all going to end
next chapter remember to update the topics title
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Good god don't do that, you have a decent chapter length atm, nice and meatyParanoid66 wrote: Next time I write something I will try to make it short.
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wow, what a cheap death....
Still thinking Tur Ryn gonna have a big price to pay, Ban Danna's not going to like the loss of the Dammed station and personnel. And it'll get traced back eventually, it always does.
But hopefully Ravn can do it
looks like what? maybe 1 or 2 chapters left...
and what's going to happen to the wolf in cold storage? and the two corealiens? And our little Boron friend......
Can't wait til the next one Paranoid
Still thinking Tur Ryn gonna have a big price to pay, Ban Danna's not going to like the loss of the Dammed station and personnel. And it'll get traced back eventually, it always does.
But hopefully Ravn can do it
looks like what? maybe 1 or 2 chapters left...
and what's going to happen to the wolf in cold storage? and the two corealiens? And our little Boron friend......
Can't wait til the next one Paranoid
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Cheap death - interesting opinion - in what manner I'm intrigued? Although the munitions were cheap lol being free!
**Notification of a small Revision**
Anyway I thought I would mention a small revision I made to the last section of Chapter 118.
I decided the Navy wouldn't release the information that the Admiral had killed herself - they are claiming she had an accident - much more honourable! So Tur had to find out about the suicide via doing a little hack of The Fall of Night!
Small change but seemed important to me!
**Notification of a small Revision**
Anyway I thought I would mention a small revision I made to the last section of Chapter 118.
I decided the Navy wouldn't release the information that the Admiral had killed herself - they are claiming she had an accident - much more honourable! So Tur had to find out about the suicide via doing a little hack of The Fall of Night!
Small change but seemed important to me!
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Cheap as in any suicide is a cheap death, I'm aware of her previous thoughts on maybe not liking what she was in a universal/evolutionary way (thinking she was something that was maybe un-natural, taking too much from fate etc).
But to have her plans fall apart and loosing the LotD base etc, then desciding to "cut" the line, to me, seemed very cheap. I'd have liked her to fight against fate a bit more.
Although she is yours and you know how she feels more intimately than I do...
Again if it was me and I thought my clone'd set me up then I'd want that sucker to go down... with a vengence.... (what's the saying: with extreme prejudice ).
Maybe that says more about me
Maybe that's what Ravn'll feel like with Tyr Ryn...
^ was that a too blatant fishing expedition? or a blatant want
and again, if I was Ban Danna, regardless of how I felt about how the Legion etc were going... I'd still be pissed that a military installation and personnel were taken out and would be very very interested in finding out who did it and making them pay.
They may be currupt personnal but they're MY corrupt personnel (if you get my drift)
And I'd not think that having network access would save them.
Plus imagine all the races governments... a known pirate/murderer had universe-wide network access with hacking abilities. They'd either want that or want that dead. That's why I think the Devils bitten off more than he can chew.
Sorry, pretty long post I know, and maybe rehashing stuff I've already said
anyway your opinion is appreciated
But to have her plans fall apart and loosing the LotD base etc, then desciding to "cut" the line, to me, seemed very cheap. I'd have liked her to fight against fate a bit more.
Although she is yours and you know how she feels more intimately than I do...
Again if it was me and I thought my clone'd set me up then I'd want that sucker to go down... with a vengence.... (what's the saying: with extreme prejudice
).Maybe that says more about me
Maybe that's what Ravn'll feel like with Tyr Ryn...
^ was that a too blatant fishing expedition?
or a blatant want and again, if I was Ban Danna, regardless of how I felt about how the Legion etc were going... I'd still be pissed that a military installation and personnel were taken out and would be very very interested in finding out who did it and making them pay.
They may be currupt personnal but they're MY corrupt personnel (if you get my drift)
And I'd not think that having network access would save them.
Plus imagine all the races governments... a known pirate/murderer had universe-wide network access with hacking abilities. They'd either want that or want that dead. That's why I think the Devils bitten off more than he can chew.
Sorry, pretty long post I know, and maybe rehashing stuff I've already said
anyway your opinion is appreciated
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I don’t see suicide as a rational act - unfortunately I have experience - if Fay was feeling totally rational she wouldn‘t have done it.
I have seen Fay on the slippery slope for a long time right from the beginning. Her mind just never integrated properly she was constantly battling against herself doubting questioning - for a host of reasons! The confrontation with FAITH was in her head just another part of the confrontation inside herself with herself!
Fay had no where to hide from this - no real peace of mind - just the distraction of her work, the excuse of her duty, plus attachments to people like Febr, and Tebbin! Plugged in her head transferred into the passive store was the memories of somebody she came to consider to be a comparative innocent - the Pirate whose body was stolen - so Faith could cheat death that was a constant rub as well!
The feeling of being soulless was always there - that a person is more than just a stream of downloaded data. The loss of Febr was a massive blow again something she felt responsible for, she even felt guilty about putting some people on the Incentive with good reason, Tebbins almost defection was a subtle knock as even this stalwart was questioning her policies. The Devil coming into the fold made that whole vendetta seem pointless and her past choice of out and out confrontation - suspect - even if she didn't want to trust his intent that feeling itself became questionable!
The loss of the Fortress was bad, but the idea that she would have to watch other Legion die (tell them they would die was harder) - even if they were criminals - they were Her Legion, Her Command.
Fay would hardly have batted an eyelid if any LotD had been used up in a battle wisely but this was personal! The real jibe was the fact that because she refused to accept FAITH, and because FAITH was Fay that made her doubly responsible - as if she had actually done these deeds in person!
Further she believed FAITH would just disappear (job done) as she realised if put into the situation of committing that unforgivable crime this was the sort of thing she would do!
If Fay had been feeling more rational she might have wondered why FAITH would risk taking out The Fortress in the first place or in such an obvious manner? Fay just couldn't figure anybody else could have done it, only FAITH had all the inside info Fay didn't know about Turs emergent ability with the AI.
By killing herself Fay believed she was culling the real person responsible for the crime not just running away! Fay believed she was guilty of the whole stinking mess, her suicide was an act of utter despair and self loathing! If Fay was a copy of the original faith - FAITH was a copy of Fay. I saw it a bit like a Captain who navigated poorly choosing rightly or wrongly to go down with the sinking ship.
Sadly I think she believed all her choices had become suspect that if she carried on anything she did would only make matters worse.
On the Revenge Issue absolutely nobody knows about Tur Ryn’s ability to interface with the Corealien style chip AI. The cousins know BANE exists as an upload but that is all.
If it gets out Tur Ryn is sure to be history even given his limitations that ability is too lethal to be tolerated. That is why he went after FAITH, and took out The Fortress - no more personality Downloads - who might discover the same talent.
Fay taking it all too personal was a strange twist of fate, and in a way more than the Devil had hoped for! As much as he was planning to kill Fay anyway for the same reasons as FAITH he would have liked to have done that one - more hands on - he actually respected Fay even though he had reason to hate her with a passion.
You know Tur would have been content to play by the rules of the Federations game within reason, if he hadn't gained that talent, and Arke hadn't blown up The Lander, and Faith been truly willing to tolerate him. However FAITH was plainly plotting from the onset. Tur was caught between the two Faiths. I see it that Tur was pushed, and Power corrupts!
Can’t say much about The Devils fate one way or the other without giving the end of the story away lol! Just realised most of my characters are kind of voyeurs they haven’t really shaped events that much at all - just been shunted along by them - or is that just my perception!
I’m very happy you care enough about the story to have opinions, and wishes as to how it might end! As it is coming towards a close I would like to thank everyone that had read along - especially those that have commented it helps to make it seem worthwhile!
EDIT sorry far too long winded!
I have seen Fay on the slippery slope for a long time right from the beginning. Her mind just never integrated properly she was constantly battling against herself doubting questioning - for a host of reasons! The confrontation with FAITH was in her head just another part of the confrontation inside herself with herself!
Fay had no where to hide from this - no real peace of mind - just the distraction of her work, the excuse of her duty, plus attachments to people like Febr, and Tebbin! Plugged in her head transferred into the passive store was the memories of somebody she came to consider to be a comparative innocent - the Pirate whose body was stolen - so Faith could cheat death that was a constant rub as well!
The feeling of being soulless was always there - that a person is more than just a stream of downloaded data. The loss of Febr was a massive blow again something she felt responsible for, she even felt guilty about putting some people on the Incentive with good reason, Tebbins almost defection was a subtle knock as even this stalwart was questioning her policies. The Devil coming into the fold made that whole vendetta seem pointless and her past choice of out and out confrontation - suspect - even if she didn't want to trust his intent that feeling itself became questionable!
The loss of the Fortress was bad, but the idea that she would have to watch other Legion die (tell them they would die was harder) - even if they were criminals - they were Her Legion, Her Command.
Fay would hardly have batted an eyelid if any LotD had been used up in a battle wisely but this was personal! The real jibe was the fact that because she refused to accept FAITH, and because FAITH was Fay that made her doubly responsible - as if she had actually done these deeds in person!
Further she believed FAITH would just disappear (job done) as she realised if put into the situation of committing that unforgivable crime this was the sort of thing she would do!
If Fay had been feeling more rational she might have wondered why FAITH would risk taking out The Fortress in the first place or in such an obvious manner? Fay just couldn't figure anybody else could have done it, only FAITH had all the inside info Fay didn't know about Turs emergent ability with the AI.
By killing herself Fay believed she was culling the real person responsible for the crime not just running away! Fay believed she was guilty of the whole stinking mess, her suicide was an act of utter despair and self loathing! If Fay was a copy of the original faith - FAITH was a copy of Fay. I saw it a bit like a Captain who navigated poorly choosing rightly or wrongly to go down with the sinking ship.
Sadly I think she believed all her choices had become suspect that if she carried on anything she did would only make matters worse.
On the Revenge Issue absolutely nobody knows about Tur Ryn’s ability to interface with the Corealien style chip AI. The cousins know BANE exists as an upload but that is all.
If it gets out Tur Ryn is sure to be history even given his limitations that ability is too lethal to be tolerated. That is why he went after FAITH, and took out The Fortress - no more personality Downloads - who might discover the same talent.
Fay taking it all too personal was a strange twist of fate, and in a way more than the Devil had hoped for! As much as he was planning to kill Fay anyway for the same reasons as FAITH he would have liked to have done that one - more hands on - he actually respected Fay even though he had reason to hate her with a passion.
You know Tur would have been content to play by the rules of the Federations game within reason, if he hadn't gained that talent, and Arke hadn't blown up The Lander, and Faith been truly willing to tolerate him. However FAITH was plainly plotting from the onset. Tur was caught between the two Faiths. I see it that Tur was pushed, and Power corrupts!
Can’t say much about The Devils fate one way or the other without giving the end of the story away lol! Just realised most of my characters are kind of voyeurs they haven’t really shaped events that much at all - just been shunted along by them - or is that just my perception!
I’m very happy you care enough about the story to have opinions, and wishes as to how it might end! As it is coming towards a close I would like to thank everyone that had read along - especially those that have commented it helps to make it seem worthwhile!
EDIT sorry far too long winded!