Here is a small gallery with arts from my comic.
The first 3 chapters have been published by Plan9 magazine.
http://www.geocities.com/galerias01/atarsia.html
I'd like your opinions, feedback, criticism...
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Medic279
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Just a little feedback:
I like Atarsia - good comic style there and the face is excellent - a niggle though - the breasts look wrong. I'm not an artist so I can't say how to do them better I can only say they look misshapen somehow (perhaps try to make it curvy but with some obvious weight). The rest of the pic is great though.
Looking through the other pics I saw a I-WAR inspired piece of work (if it isn't I-WAR then check it out) -nice.
Hope this helps some
Matt
I like Atarsia - good comic style there and the face is excellent - a niggle though - the breasts look wrong. I'm not an artist so I can't say how to do them better I can only say they look misshapen somehow (perhaps try to make it curvy but with some obvious weight). The rest of the pic is great though.
Looking through the other pics I saw a I-WAR inspired piece of work (if it isn't I-WAR then check it out) -nice.
Hope this helps some
Matt
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alpharomeo81
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Do you mean the cargo ship with the containers?
I found that such ship layout was practical. It's like a space truck. Cockpit in the front, engines behind.
The other ship is more like like an arrow bow. It is required for the comic to be that way because it will insert the bow into the enemy ship before the boarding takes place.
As you may see it has some "bottle" shape and the thing you may say that looks like I-War is the ring. Any ship with jumping capabilities should need a space drive with a particle accelerator.
However this ship doesn't use the woprmhole principle but the Alcubierre drive principle, folding space to travel.
The other ships were also designed using some practical considerations. Such technology should be realistic and since it is some near future, there are no energy shields and no warp drives, except in the ship I mentioned.
Here is the english translation of the text in that gallery:
"According to the legend of Atarsia, goddess of retribution, she used to become a huge sea dragon which power had no limits, bringing terror among the pirates in the seven oceans.
In the future, when mankind finally began conquering space, new pirates, Margani spice dealers, bring terror to Coalition of Camberra... then a mysterious woman who took the name of Atarsia will stop them with their dragon ship.
Pilot Officer Alejandra Adden will try to uncover her identity to finally discover her role in the legend of Atarsia"
This script was written in 2002 right after 9/11. I made a fan project with Dreadnaught and since he is from NY, I thought about some sort of script devoted to that, however didn't want it to be a political comic, so I did some tweaking as the story goes to make him to be a corrupted politician.
I have written the 5 chapters and I am working of chapter 5. However, the storyline goes beyond, until the space war is stopped by Atarsia. In chapter 5 you see how the political component is out of the game.
Atarsia is an antihero, she uses methods that could be questioned but she is good in fact.
I must have been a prophet, because in 2002 there was no coalition and no insurgents. The Margani dealers were a way to depict the Latin American reality of drug dealers and in recent days there was a big scandal that brought 2 expresidents to jail after being corrupted politicians.
About the breasts... which one, the cloaked woman or the other one?
I found that such ship layout was practical. It's like a space truck. Cockpit in the front, engines behind.
The other ship is more like like an arrow bow. It is required for the comic to be that way because it will insert the bow into the enemy ship before the boarding takes place.
As you may see it has some "bottle" shape and the thing you may say that looks like I-War is the ring. Any ship with jumping capabilities should need a space drive with a particle accelerator.
However this ship doesn't use the woprmhole principle but the Alcubierre drive principle, folding space to travel.
The other ships were also designed using some practical considerations. Such technology should be realistic and since it is some near future, there are no energy shields and no warp drives, except in the ship I mentioned.
Here is the english translation of the text in that gallery:
"According to the legend of Atarsia, goddess of retribution, she used to become a huge sea dragon which power had no limits, bringing terror among the pirates in the seven oceans.
In the future, when mankind finally began conquering space, new pirates, Margani spice dealers, bring terror to Coalition of Camberra... then a mysterious woman who took the name of Atarsia will stop them with their dragon ship.
Pilot Officer Alejandra Adden will try to uncover her identity to finally discover her role in the legend of Atarsia"
This script was written in 2002 right after 9/11. I made a fan project with Dreadnaught and since he is from NY, I thought about some sort of script devoted to that, however didn't want it to be a political comic, so I did some tweaking as the story goes to make him to be a corrupted politician.
I have written the 5 chapters and I am working of chapter 5. However, the storyline goes beyond, until the space war is stopped by Atarsia. In chapter 5 you see how the political component is out of the game.
Atarsia is an antihero, she uses methods that could be questioned but she is good in fact.
I must have been a prophet, because in 2002 there was no coalition and no insurgents. The Margani dealers were a way to depict the Latin American reality of drug dealers and in recent days there was a big scandal that brought 2 expresidents to jail after being corrupted politicians.
About the breasts... which one, the cloaked woman or the other one?
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Thalass
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