Rogues Revenge Ch 7 Pt 2 19/6/03

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Mercenary
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Post by Mercenary »

Like a vengeful angel of death, here comes Max...

Excellent read, it'll be interesting to see how he copes when he has two people to lead to safety... running down corridors with guns blazing and grenades going off in all directions may not be conducive to the health of the rescued parties. :wink:
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KiwiNZ
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Post by KiwiNZ »

Excellent read, Steve! Heck is he violent, can imagine him to look like Bruce Willis :lol: blood-stained shirt and all. Good to see he actually has retrieved Zee from the bot, was a bit concerned there. Curious though as to how he escaped this huge overload explosion.

Looking forward to see how the battle continues. Poor prisoners ... they probably wish to be rescued by an army and not by Rambo :D

found two things

"ripped opened" - ripped open?
"He voice" - Her
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SteveMill
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Post by SteveMill »

KiwiNZ wrote:Excellent read, Steve! Heck is he violent, can imagine him to look like Bruce Willis :lol: blood-stained shirt and all. Good to see he actually has retrieved Zee from the bot, was a bit concerned there. Curious though as to how he escaped this huge overload explosion.

Looking forward to see how the battle continues. Poor prisoners ... they probably wish to be rescued by an army and not by Rambo :D

found two things

"ripped opened" - ripped open?
"He voice" - Her
He escaped by using the corpses as a shield, will have to make that clearer. Thanks for the spots.
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Post by Fear »

1 small mistake, continued after the ************

There was no ********** :D had to look really good to find it :P
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SteveMill
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Post by SteveMill »

Fear wrote:1 small mistake, continued after the ************

There was no ********** :D had to look really good to find it :P
Ah yes, forgot to put it in after the last edit.
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Moss
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Post by Moss »

Suberb, only one criticism, you realy should learn to type faster!!! lol, I just don't wanna stop reading this stuff :D
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Gandalf The White
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Post by Gandalf The White »

Nice stuff Steve. Where's the next bit then?
some who deserve life receive death. Others who deserve death receive life. Can you give it to them? Don't be eager to deal out death in judgement, for not even the wise can see all ends.
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SteveMill
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Post by SteveMill »

The Doctor wrote:Nice stuff Steve. Where's the next bit then?
It's on it's way - I need to arrive at an appropriate cliff-hanger, once i've figured out how to insinuate a bespectacled young wizard into the plot for future marketing purposes. :wink:
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Oldman
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Post by Oldman »

SteveMill wrote:
The Doctor wrote:Nice stuff Steve. Where's the next bit then?
It's on it's way - I need to arrive at an appropriate cliff-hanger, once i've figured out how to insinuate a bespectacled young wizard into the plot for future marketing purposes. :wink:

Easy, just a slight name change...'Max Potter'.... :wink: :D

Oldman :)
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