Rogues Revenge Ch 9 completed 13/7/03

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Moss wrote:Very nice Steve, I certainly hope Max and Tyre's vacation is trouble free, they both need a break after visiting the ever charming Law :P .

Still much to do yet tho by the look of it!

I guess R Gunns ship had a good few old movies aboard when it got lost in the X part of the galaxy, light sabres at dawn indeed :D

Having the Njy Butcher one side and Law on the other doesn't sound much fun.

Looking forward to more, as allways, hope the sun keeps shining for you, and the story keeps flowing for us, cheers Steve very good read.
My underlying premise is that these stories survive as legends in the way the King Arthur legend does today despite the passage of time. The Goner were established to preserve memories of Earth from the deliberate purge Argon civilisation underwent and I figure with the passage of time things get blurred.
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Excellant Read

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Great read i am new to x universe any chance you can tell me where to find the previous chapters

cheers

timb :)
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Re: Excellant Read

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timb wrote:Great read i am new to x universe any chance you can tell me where to find the previous chapters

cheers

timb :)
Hi Timb

A possible new reader! Great, thanks for the interest. If you follow my signature you'll find the first two books on a site kiwinz has set up. They represent my first attempt at creative writing so they probably improve as they go along. (They damn well better do after all the 'How to' book I've bought. :P )
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Mercenary wrote:Let's hope Law doesn't get to make his move whilst Max is sunning himself on the beach... :)

Just one spot:

"if Max fell had held him back." - should that be "fall"
No, but it needed a comma to make sense. Thanks for the spot.
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Faze wrote:Keep it up Steve.

No1 fan.

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Thanks Faze,

Really is appreciated. I struggled a bit on this chapter, particularly the first part but have the next chapter mapped out now. It might have to wait until the weekend though as work crises predominate at the moment.
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Post by Fear »

SteveMill wrote: "We’ll drop you off in the Orca when we pick up an LT kit.”
Isn't that TL kit?
Good story though. Can't wait for the next part.
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Fear wrote:
SteveMill wrote: "We’ll drop you off in the Orca when we pick up an LT kit.”
Isn't that TL kit?
Good story though. Can't wait for the next part.
Nope - Laser tower kit. I might need to amend that if it's unclear.

Thanks
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Points:

"In the light of recent events and with Law’s new base now public knowledge interest in his war with the Stoertebeker Clan was at an all-time high and she had loudly insisted Max faced the universe press. " coudl do with punctuation around the "and with Law’s new base now public knowledge" I think.

Apart from that its a great read and I'm hoping for a full account on the Bio-gas fab attack :D

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Tanks

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Thanks for that i have forwarded the link to home and shall download them later for a read whilst the other half amuses hersel with eastenders tonight i will let you know what my thoughts were after i finish them.....

I must admit to being really excited about the fourthcoming release of X2....


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timb wrote:Thanks for that i have forwarded the link to home and shall download them later for a read whilst the other half amuses hersel with eastenders tonight i will let you know what my thoughts were after i finish them.....

I must admit to being really excited about the fourthcoming release of X2....


tim

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1) welcome timb :D

2) Steve, one thing that I noticed:

"what else he’d dare" - you were refering to Morn here, I believe. SHE?

3) Steve, I lied, I noticed two things :D

The reason for the Bliss Place to be re-built in Menelaus Paradise is protection, I presume. But it very much makes it a 'we deliver to your front door' venture, doesn't it? I mean apart from that on clan in Ghinns Escape there is no way pirate TS' will make it through to him and pick up their own.
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KiwiNZ wrote:
3) Steve, I lied, I noticed two things :D

The reason for the Bliss Place to be re-built in Menelaus Paradise is protection, I presume. But it very much makes it a 'we deliver to your front door' venture, doesn't it? I mean apart from that on clan in Ghinns Escape there is no way pirate TS' will make it through to him and pick up their own.

Had a very similar thought, the Bliss Place would be better positioned near a source of weed, so with the Fab in Scale Plate Green it appears that sector would be a much better location.

Also if Max is temporary custodian of Menelaus Paradise would the Boron really appreciate him building an "illegal" factory in their space. What happens when the fighting stops and the Boron then ask Max to hand back the sector... They may see such an act as offensive and withdraw support...

But again these are only thoughts and will maybe add an interesting twist in the story... :)
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KiwiNZ wrote:1) welcome timb :D

2) Steve, one thing that I noticed:

"what else he’d dare" - you were refering to Morn here, I believe. SHE?

3) Steve, I lied, I noticed two things :D

The reason for the Bliss Place to be re-built in Menelaus Paradise is protection, I presume. But it very much makes it a 'we deliver to your front door' venture, doesn't it? I mean apart from that on clan in Ghinns Escape there is no way pirate TS' will make it through to him and pick up their own.
Damn those libereated Teladi! Spot of the century there. :D

Your point about the transportation difficulty is correct, which is why the Boron territories were being supplied through a contracted TL. You can be sure Max has spotted the potential for profit here. :)
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Mercenary wrote:
KiwiNZ wrote:
3) Steve, I lied, I noticed two things :D

The reason for the Bliss Place to be re-built in Menelaus Paradise is protection, I presume. But it very much makes it a 'we deliver to your front door' venture, doesn't it? I mean apart from that on clan in Ghinns Escape there is no way pirate TS' will make it through to him and pick up their own.

Had a very similar thought, the Bliss Place would be better positioned near a source of weed, so with the Fab in Scale Plate Green it appears that sector would be a much better location.

Also if Max is temporary custodian of Menelaus Paradise would the Boron really appreciate him building an "illegal" factory in their space. What happens when the fighting stops and the Boron then ask Max to hand back the sector... They may see such an act as offensive and withdraw support...

But again these are only thoughts and will maybe add an interesting twist in the story... :)
The problem with Scale Plate Green is that without Daht it is vulnerable to attack and Max does not want to have to defend too many static points. Although he has the Swamp Weed factory there it is a relatively low value target and cheaply replaced. A Bliss Place would be more valuable and make two targets to defend.

With the clock ticking on the inevitable discovery of his hidden funding he is probably not overly concerned with legalities or upsetting the Boron too much. He is their best chance of retaining that sector so they'll have to provide leeway.

The next chapter will deal with business issues among other things.

At the moment there is no pirate base in Ghinns Escape but in Resurgence it was revealed that Nibris, the M.P factotum, feared Njy's alliance with a pirate clan.

“Then it’s good that one of us is well-connected Mr Force,” she smiled thinly. “I would seek another hobby, were I in your position. You really should not venture beyond Menalaus Paradise.”

“Are you saying that it’s forbidden?” Max asked carefully.

“No Max, if I could be less formal, wiser people than I have seen fit to grant you an unlimited license. You may kill yourself in any manner you please but it is my job to keep these sectors secure and given the weakness of my position I do that by provoking no-one. I don’t want history to remember Joahan Nibris as the person who started a new war with the Split or the Xenon. You are free to go beyond the gate but if you do there will be no aid from my sectors, no matter who your friends are.”

“Fair enough,” Max replied. “Where did the Clan ships come from?”

Nibris stiffened, visibly taking a slow breath as she phrased her reply.

“Split sectors Mr Force, Njy harbours them. One day soon a new clan will appear, here on the Frontier, and I will have another enemy at my throat.”

So we can see how Law manipulated her fears to get her co-operation while also being allied with Njy. He's been more cunning than a barrel full of weasels. :wink:
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Excellent,

Thanks for the recap :)
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Mercenary wrote:Excellent,

Thanks for the recap :)

dito :D


a 'safer' place could be next to the chip fab, though. Still, there is the danger that he might lose two valuable stations in one go.
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KiwiNZ wrote:
Mercenary wrote:Excellent,

Thanks for the recap :)

dito :D


a 'safer' place could be next to the chip fab, though. Still, there is the danger that he might lose two valuable stations in one go.
True, but with Xela based in the Chip Fab he would not want to stretch his defences to cover both. It makes more sense to Max to have it in MP where his main defences are and he can control sector access.

His TL is going to be pretty busy transporting materials.
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SteveMill wrote:
His TL is going to be pretty busy transporting materials.
that is what I thought. But then again, with half a dozen TS' onboard they should cope.

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