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Jenantar
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Post by Jenantar »

no more Tor grall

:( :( :( :( :( :( :( :( :(

*Cries* NOOOOOOOOOOOO00000000oooooooooo........

I am crushed! That means the story wil end extremely soon.
Oyh! What is the meaning of this Merc! Dont you like the story of Merc that you have written. Why not keep going with that one. Since you have surely got a trofee here. :wink:

Then end of Tor Grall,,, Kinda hard to comprehend...

Merc never working on the epic story of Tor Grall ever again,,, Kinda hard to grasp mentally.

There will be gaps in the story wich will never be filled,,, Even more hard to comprehend! *screams in horror!*

*faints on the floor*
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Post by Jenantar »

By the way.. When I think about it. I got my wish true that I asked for merc to do loong time ago. Even though it might have been planned already. ^^

Sweaty saving Tor when hes totally helpless and Sweaty shows her terrible inhuman strength, wich could be explained by the simple fact that she is a ship and a series 5k chip. :)

At least I got that wish true. To bad real life always punches me in the face.

No more Tor Grall....

Ahhh...

If I won 1 million dollars I would pay merc a monthly salary just to see the story about Tor continue. ^^

But hey.. That might happen. ^^ More weird things have happened in this insane world. My friend for instance,,, where in such hurry he jumped out the on the second floor when he needed to get to the buss within 60 seconds. Though small details like that there was a field of soft green grass below him does not really count that much. And 3 meters we all jump down occasionally. ^^ Though we hopefully dont break the ankle when in a bad mood that happens to "some" people "some times". :D

That's it for all my ranting about nothing. ^^

Good part merc. Keep it up! :D
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Post by Al »

Fantastic end although there are some things I presume you will cover in the epilogue.

There are a few typos and grammar errors in the second part:

"A brief wave of dizziness made his stumble " should be him.

There are others but I'm too busy to list them. I'll try and read it again later on.

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Post by Al »

"Tor glanced down already he was standing in a growing pool of his own blood." - needs a comma after "down".

"and the Split was once mare sitting " - "mare" should be more.

"Steel clashed together, he and found out " - "he" and "and" wrong way round.

"Feran continued to close dropping into a crouch as he turned made a full three sixty turn" - should be "a crouch as he turned and made a ..." or the "and" could go between the "crouch" and "as".

" match patients group " should be " match patient's group"

Still a great read second time round :)

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Post by Mercenary »

Cheers Al,

I'll get these edits in place when I submit the epilogue.

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Post by Skyman »

Wow, what an incredible story. Thank you Merc.
Why can't you publish this one.? Don't tell me, because it is "fan fiction". I would have enjoyed this story even if I had never heard of the X games.

Well, now that you have replaced Frank Herbert as my favourite author, I had better start reading Dark Mage.

I wish you good luck with your writing, and look forward to the days when I can buy your novels, and add them to my bookshelf.
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Post by skullhead »

This is the best series from the beginning to the end. Hands down its the best that I've ever read. Great work Merc.
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Post by Urashima Keitaro »

Aye, kudos to your brilliance mate. You kept me captivated until the end, and that I respect and admire. I salute you, and, hopefully, one day you'll be back. Until then, this is Keitaro aka CP aka Zemethius saying sayonara, good hunting my friend.
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Jenantar
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Post by Jenantar »

Where have merc gone!?

Have he vanished to never be seen again....? Did he just drop the project unfinnished??!!

If you have... Then say so at least merc.. ^^

Its a pain seeing The story about Tor being in the state of "Limbo"...

Basicly in the space between stopped and continued...

Come on Merc! Give us a sign! Send some bolts down from the skies to give us an answer or something! ^^
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Post by KiwiNZ »

He said there would be aftermath ... but then his calculator broke :D
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Post by Jenantar »

Well.... Then he should either buy a new calculator... Or start configuring the numbers on a solid paper instead. ^^

I mean... Its total silence here... He could as well be dead... since if he is not here to state the opposite.. How do we know?

Give us a sign merc! :lol:
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Post by Mercenary »

Oops, started the epilogue but kept being distracted by other stuff...

Anyway, if I can get the current workload out of the way ahead of time I can then try and put the finishing piece to the story.
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Post by KiwiNZ »

Now if that isn't good news :D

Good to see you again!
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Jenantar
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Post by Jenantar »

:D He´s Alive!! :D

Damn good to see you again Merc!

My point was not to make you rush your work to make your already heavy shedule even more painfull.

My point was that you at least say hello in the forum one time every week.

^^

But putting that aside... Damn relieved that you had not dropped the story about Tor and that you are alive and well... Since you did practically dissapear on us... ^^

Dont you dare do that again! :evil:

:lol:

Anyway.... GOOD TO HAVE YOU BACK!! :)
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Post by Skyman »

Hehe, good to see you have not forgotten us Merc. :wink:
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