KiwiNZ wrote:Very nice read, Merc. Now that he has pretty much finished with all the preps get us some action, will you? Just kidding. It is quite funny to read about medical and food supplies and maintenance gear, which we never get involved with in the game and yet, this can take up a lot of cargo space.
I noticed a couple of typos:
"As the knife his he jerked forward" - his=hit?
"He returned the cockpit" - returned to?
Yep it's time to get the show on the road Next chapter will cover much of the trip to Omicron Lyrae...
some who deserve life receive death. Others who deserve death receive life. Can you give it to them? Don't be eager to deal out death in judgement, for not even the wise can see all ends.
Nice read Merc, after rereading part one tho it seems Creed took a long time telling Tor about the writing on his neck.
Nice dream that, not! hehe. Looks like its about time to get the show on the road.
You mention two Perseus ships in part two, I thought he was getting three? also near the end of part two you say "Both Pegasus ships docked in the security section"!
Yep, he did get three but only two turned up to collect him from the trading station, one as carrier, second as escort, the third was left at the Tors station.
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Chapter completed below the *******
Have had a thought though, are you going to change the title of this story or are you going to leave it? Just curious.
some who deserve life receive death. Others who deserve death receive life. Can you give it to them? Don't be eager to deal out death in judgement, for not even the wise can see all ends.
Excellent finish to the chapter. Will be interesting what this new encryption has to offer. Females! They just don't give you an answer that is useful when you ask a serious question Now, I too would really like what that encryption is good for!
Looking forward to the next chapter. Looks like we are getting the show on the road.
The Doctor wrote:
Have had a thought though, are you going to change the title of this story or are you going to leave it? Just curious.
I do have another title in mind, but for the moment it's not fixed.
KiwiNZ wrote:Excellent finish to the chapter. Will be interesting what this new encryption has to offer. Females! They just don't give you an answer that is useful when you ask a serious question Now, I too would really like what that encryption is good for!
Looking forward to the next chapter. Looks like we are getting the show on the road.
found one typo:
"then await delivery" than?
Ahh, well at the moment only Sweety knows. Tor is simply aware that this information exists but does not know it does.
As for the typo, I'll go check but I was considering a time reference...
(Edited:) Yep it's a typo, cheers.
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Yup very good, I'm now at about 70% of the first tale, and it reads very nice. I do like haveing an Ai controll allot of Tor's empire. Does remind me of Neuromancer. Can't wait for the next chapter.
some who deserve life receive death. Others who deserve death receive life. Can you give it to them? Don't be eager to deal out death in judgement, for not even the wise can see all ends.
Just kidding. It is quite funny to read about medical and food supplies and maintenance gear, which we never get involved with in the game and yet, this can take up a lot of cargo space.
