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Total Destruction

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PART 1 PROLOGUE


Johan Berkel was sat in a corner of the bar. It was crowded with every kind of pirate from shady veterans to bright-eyed greenhorns. "How long you been flying" an old timer inquired.
"Bout a Jazura" Johan replied "just bought an old lifter so im gonna trade
meatsteaks"
"Dont stray unless youve got back up" advised the old timer.
"Im looking for a gunner" asked Johan.
"try my grandson Brent" the old timer grinned showing toothless gums "BRENT! ive found you a job kid"
"Hi im Brent" said the young man "mind if i join you on your ship"
"Ok im Johan Berkel'' Johan replied examining Brent. He was no more than twenty jazuras old with piercing blue eyes and jet black hair. His muscular arms were covered in tatoos.


PART 2 IN THE BUSINESS


"Any ideas?" Johan asked preparing to undock.
"Try the energy cell run from The Wall" Brent replied.
"Take over while i go wash my hands" Johan said bitterly.
He walked into the washroom and stared into the mirror. A battle hardened face looked back at him. Ten years in a buster cockpit and he thought he knew how to fly. Looking back it seems so different, so responsive. Still, he knew where to avoid trouble. Walking back onto the bridge he sat into his chair and set autopilot to The Wall. "Now i can get some rest" he thought. Meanwhile in his cabin Brent lay on his bunk thinking about home. "BRENT WEVE GOT COMPANY!" screamed Johan " A BUSTER AND TWO HARRIERS" Brent leaped into the rear turret and armed the APAC, targeting the buster knocking its shields down.
"How are the shields" Brent asked down the intercom
"Fine but dont hold back" replied Johan.
Four more shots and the buster blew up sending debris all over. The remaining harriers scattered before Brent could target them. Through the wreckage Johan spotted a crate and scanned it. "Unknown object" he muttered "best pick it up" The lifter which was newly christened Johan's Moneymaker carried on to Solar Power Plant Alpha picking up energy cells then returned back to Argon Prime. Johan docked on the Equipment Dock when he remembered the unknown object. When he told the salesman he mentioned a missile. "Give you eighty k for it" offered the man. "Done" Replied Johan. After he made several more runs Johan could finally buy a buster. He Christened it Red Dawn.
"Brent, You can fly the Moneymaker but you scan, report trade deals then i tell you where to go. Got it kid?" said Johan proudly.
"Yessir" answered Brent "Thanks for this oppotunity boss"


NEXT CHAPTER-Legend Of The Total Destruction
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Last edited by elwayno on Mon, 4. Feb 08, 22:31, edited 1 time in total.
Always one eye on the scanner and a missile ready for when its my turn to fight. khaak keep coming and i keep blasting. Thats how to survive.
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Post by Cha0sLord11 »

Pretty good.. Can't wait for Chapter 2 :)
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Post by artgoa »

Nice ...more...
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Post by collins50 »

what happened to the TWO HARRIERS,
and what type of experance does Brent have,
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Post by elwayno »

lol maybe i need to do some editing. guess ive got it easier than jk rowling :D
paragraphing might be a good idea and maybe a tiny bit of planning. this is 1st rp ive done.
Always one eye on the scanner and a missile ready for when its my turn to fight. khaak keep coming and i keep blasting. Thats how to survive.
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Post by elwayno »

PART 2 LEGEND OF THE TOTAL DESTRUCTION

Brent and Johan landed on the Argon Prime shipyard. "Gonna hire another pilot and upgrade to a nova" said Johan thoughtfully as they walked to the bar. "I reckon you're ready to run on your own while i go pirate hunting" he continued "i got this license so i might as well use it and nothing beats the thrill of a good fight".
"Thanks boss" answered Brett grinning ear to ear. A giant of a man walked up to them. He had red hair and it covered most of his face except his eyes that seemed TO pierce Brett's core. "Johan Berkel... I aint seen you since Total Destruction" said the giant smiling like he had seen an old friend.
"Tanner, how're you my old pal" cried Johan "Brett, this is Tanner Polad"
"Total Destruction?" asked Brett suddenly snapping out of his shock.
"It was a carrier i served on as a fighter pilot" replied Johan "long story and i dont really like talking about my time in the fleet. I lost someone special to me back then."
"Is that why you told my grandad you've only been flying for a jazura?" Brett questioned.
"yeah" said Johan holding his head "Total Destruction was a new prototype battleship that had twenty gigs worth of shielding and a hundred guns on eleven turrets. She held seventy-five novas and two mercs. We were supposed to test her battle capabilities but we never made it to the Xenon sector. In Dannas Chance Captain Pearson, our commanding officer sent me and Tanner in a scouting party then the ship disappeared without warning. My fionce Sura was onboard and i still think about her everyday. Happened just before the khaak appeared as well"
"What do you think happened?" asked Brett.
To his suprise Tanner answered "Xenon got it" his shaggy head in his hands. They sat in silence for a stazura.

"What are you gonna do now Tanner?" asked Johan.
"Try finding odd jobs but nothings been coming up" replied Tanner gruffly.
"What ship do you pilot?" smiled Johan.
"Nova" answered Tanner
Johan's log beeped as the dockmaster sent a message saying the nova was ready and fully armed. "Sura's Blade" muttered Johan to himself "yes that is the name"
"Johan?" Brett asked "are you ok?"
"Yeah. Wanna go pirate hunting with me Tanner?"
"Ok but ill....." Answered Tanner suddenly getting interupted by the station announcer.
"Attention all visitors. khaak have been sighted in this sector. Please make your way to the hangers to evacuate" said the announcer trying to stay calm.
"Damn she aint joking" cried Johan as the purple pyramids fired at anything and everything in the sector "Brett get out of here and take some refugees with you. Ill stay and cover the rear in the nova"
"Not alone you ain't" answered Tanner smiling "ill be saving your hide again"
"What do you mean again?" laughed Johan as they ran to their ships.


NEXT PART LAST STAND OF THE ARGON
Always one eye on the scanner and a missile ready for when its my turn to fight. khaak keep coming and i keep blasting. Thats how to survive.

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