Rogues Revenge, Chapter 10: Pt 3 & 4 28/7/03

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 10:22

Adamskini wrote:ok, what just happened

im tired and knackered from work so bare with me, but did he just buy all the factories? did i miss a nuance?

or did he just get them to agree to pay 10% of there factories price into a 'war fund'?

or what?

\o/

He just bought all the factories in the sector for 10% of the construction cost.

Reworded to make it clearer, thanks for the feedback - I was racing the go-to-work-clock finishing that up.

Al · Post by Al » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 10:53

But you kind of ended before this actually happened. He offered to buy them and then all hell broke lose amongt the factory owners.

Al

Gandalf The White · Post by **Gandalf The White** » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 10:57

Next please!lol.

Looking forward to it

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 11:01

Al wrote:But you kind of ended before this actually happened. He offered to buy them and then all hell broke lose amongt the factory owners.

Al

no - they were told to signal the deal by standing up. they all did.

Al · Post by Al » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 12:15

ah must must have missed that bit in all the excitment. I'll go back and have another read of the last bit.

Al

Al · Post by Al » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 13:15

Ah it right there in the middle of the exciting bit. Guess I need to read more carefully. Perhaps if I go back to doing that I might also stop some corrections to be made

Al

Moss · Post by **Moss** » Fri, 25. Jul 03, 13:50

Hehe, nice ending to part two there Steve I think Stanner got everything he deserved

and now Max owns all the factories in this sector, cool

The countdown was great btw, and would have loved to have actualy seen the look on Stanners face

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 11:14

New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve

Gandalf The White · Post by **Gandalf The White** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 11:49

Interesting Steve, sounds good. Now here comes some fast trading and credits.

Mercenary · Post by **Mercenary** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 12:35

SteveMill wrote:New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve

That's quite a step to be making

Based on this work it should be a formality...

Just one potential spot:

"It wasn't enough to safe those..." - should be "save"?

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 12:46

Mercenary wrote:
SteveMill wrote:New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve

That's quite a step to be making Based on this work it should be a formality...

Just one potential spot:

"It wasn't enough to safe those..." - should be "save"?

Thanks - and thanks for the spot. Corrected it in the master, tried to correct it here but the size of the thread is causing submission problems.

Al · Post by Al » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 13:32

Nice section. Looks like Max has a man to get his income sorted out while he's out playing.

is it not time Max was out for R&R or is he just about to go? Will be interesting to see what happens in his absence

Al

KiwiNZ · Post by **KiwiNZ** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 14:58

SteveMill wrote:New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve

Wooohooo! You omitted some detail in your pm there. Congratulations! Saving one year in courses and fees makes this novel profitable already, ey? Great, good to hear!

As to the new part:

Great read. This was a good safe regarding the new character. Luckily his men trust him to an extremely high level by now. Interesting character. Still not sure myself if he is spying. But of course, he could just be a very benefitial addition to the team.

Looking forward to more.

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 15:43

KiwiNZ wrote:
SteveMill wrote:New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve
Interesting character. Still not sure myself if he is spying.

Who knows?

Al · Post by Al » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 16:25

SteveMill wrote:New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve

congratulations m8. I think its defintely something worth doing considering the considerable talent you have shown in writing Rogues.

And who says you cant teach old dogs new tricks

Al

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 16:39

Al wrote:
SteveMill wrote:New part posted.

As I mentioned to Kiwinz in a pm reply - from October I'll be back at University part-time doing creative writing at undergraduate level. The Head of Department has admitted me straight to Year 2 on the strength of the Rogue series.

I'm hoping to get a publishable fantasy novel out of it.

Steve
congratulations m8. I think its defintely something worth doing considering the considerable talent you have shown in writing Rogues.

And who says you cant teach old dogs new tricks

Al

Thanks Al, much appreciated as I've wrestled long with my cowardice over this. The thought of exposing something as personal as self-penned genre fiction to a bunch of literary and probably know-it-all nineteen years olds in workshops is more than a bit daunting but there are craft skills I need to pick up. Luckily the Head of Dept also writes fantasy fiction and he'll try and assemble a suitable seminar group.

SteveMill · Post by **SteveMill** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 18:22

Chapter finished off with 1000 word addition.

steve

Gandalf The White · Post by **Gandalf The White** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 18:28

Very nice. Like the descriptions as well

Al · Post by Al » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 18:39

Nice end although a little graphic of the death for my liking, but thats just personal preference. Nice to see that there is obviously some action ahead. Would never have guessed

Al

Adamskini · Post by **Adamskini** » Mon, 28. Jul 03, 19:57

keep them coming

\o/

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Rogues Revenge, Chapter 10: Pt 3 & 4 28/7/03